Correct This paper derives the cooling formula of fan-coil units based on the characteristics of fan-coil air-conditioning systems and heat transfer theories, and puts forward a new method to gauge cooling called Cooling Metering on the Air-side. The new method can monitor individual air-conditioning cooling consumption during a period of time by detecting the condition of inlet air – temperature and humidity – of the fan-coil air-conditioning system as well as the parameters of the inlet cooling water provided by the chiller.
Too long The gear transmission is grade seven, the gear gap is 0.00012 radians, the gear gap has different output values corresponding to any given input value, non-linearity of the gear gap model can be described by using the phase function method, the existing backlash block in the non-linear library of the Matlab/zdimulink toolbox can be used, the initial value of gear gap in the backlash block is set to zero.9
Correct The gear transmission is grade seven. The gear gap, which is 0.00012 radians, has different output values corresponding to any given input value. The non-linearity of the gear gap model can be described by using the phase function method. The existing backlash block in the non-linear library of the Matlab/zdimulink toolbox can be used; the initial value of gear gap in the backlash block is set to zero.
Another type of super-long sentence that frequently occurs in technical papers is that of a list. The writer wants to give a large amount of data, usually parameter values, and puts this information into one long, paragraph-sized sentence. However, the best
way to give such type and quantity of information is to tabulate it (put it in a bulleted list).
Too long …where m is the mass of the heavy disk mounted at the mid-span of a massless elastic shaft, e is the eccentricity of the mass center from the geometric center of the disk, ö is the angle between the orientation of the
eccentricity and the î axis, kî and kç are the stiffness coefficients in two
principal directions of shaft respectively, c is the viscous damping coefficient of the shaft and the disk, ci is the inner damping coefficient of shaft, ù is the
rotating speed, îs and çs are the components of initial bend in directions of î ,ç axes respectively: î s = rb cosè ,ç s = rb sinè .1
Correct Where
m is the mass of the heavy disk mounted at the mid-span of a massless elasticshaft,
e is the eccentricity of the mass center from the geometric center of the disk,
ö is the angle between the orientation of the eccentricity and the î axis,
kî and kç are the stiffness coefficients in the two principal directions
of the shaft,
c is the viscous damping coefficient of the shaft and the disk,
ci is the inner damping coefficient of the shaft,
ù is the rotating speed,
îs and çs are the components of initial bend in directions of î ,ç axes, respectively: î s = r b cosè ,ç s r= . b sinè
Too long The clear height of the case is 6.15 meters; the thickness of the roof is 0.85 meters; the thickness of the bottom is 0.90 meters, the overall width is 26.6 meters, the overall length of the axial cord is 304.5 meters, the length of the jacking section is about 148.8 meters; the weight of the case is about 24127 tons.3
Clear • Case clearance height
? Roof thickness
? Bottom thickness
? Overall width
? Overall length of the axial cord
? Length of the jacking section
? Weight of the case
6.15 meters 0.85 meters 0.90 meters 26.6 meters 3 04.5 meters
148.8 meters (approx.) 24127 tons (approx.)
Prefacing the main idea of a sentence by stating the purpose, location or reason first
Chinese writers often preface the main topic of a sentence by first stating the purpose, location, reason, examples and conditions as introductory elements. However, this has the effect of demoting the importance of the main idea and making the reader think the author is indirect. Bring the main idea to the beginning of the sentence stating any locations, reasons, etc., afterwards.
For the application in automobile interiors, this paper studies the nesting optimization problem in leather manufacturing. 5
This paper studies the nesting optimization problem in leather manufacturing for application in automobile interiors.
Especially when numerical control (NC) techniques[4] are widely used in industry and rapid prototype methods[5][6] bring a huge economical benefits, the advantage of constructing 3D model[7][8][9] becomes extremely obvious.2 The advantage of constructing a 3D model[7][8][9] becomes extremely obvious especially when numerical control (NC) techniques[4] are widely used in industry and rapid prototype methods[5][6] bring a huge economical benefits.
Inside the test box, the space was filled with asbestos.15 The space inside the test box was filled with asbestos.
Incorrect Correct
Incorrect Correct In practice, we employed this approach to dispose of a wheelhouse subassembly of one kind of auto-body, and the results show that this method is feasible.16
We employed this approach to dispose of a wheelhouse subassembly of one kind of auto-body, and the results show that this method is feasible.
To ensure sheet metal quality as well as assembly quality, CMMs are widely used in automotive industry production.16
CMMs are widely used in automotive industry production to ensure sheet metal quality as well as assembly quality.
Tendency of placing phrases which indicate time at the beginning of a sentence
Incorrect When U is taken as the control parameter, the BDs for ' =0.0, 0.001, 0.005 are shown in Fig. 8.
Correct Figure 8 shows the BDs for ' =0.0, 0.001, and 0.005 when U is taken as the control parameter.
Place the most important subject at the beginning of the sentence for emphasis
Incorrect Based on the triangulation structure built from unorganized points or a CAD model, the extended STL format is described in this section.4
Correct The extended STL format is described in this section based on the triangulation structure built from unorganized points or a CAD model.
Incorrect The 3D dentition defect and restoration element models are designed precisely with complicated surfaces.4
Correct The 3D dentition defect and restoration element models with complicated surfaces are designed precisely.
“which/ that”
The antecedent (noun or pronoun) to which which refers is not specific, causing confusion.
Antecedent The noun or pronoun to which a pronoun refers.
‘The Shijiazhuang south road underground bridge possesses the largest jacking force, which is built at 1978(10680t).’ [‘Shijiazhuang south road underground bridge possesses the largest jacking force which is built at 1978(10680t).’
Absolute truths in paleontology are often elusive, and even the filmmakers were surprised at the fierce arguments that split the scientists when an initial brainstorming session was else.
‘Respectively’ and ‘respective’
Respectively refers back to two or more persons or things only in the order they were previously designated or mentioned. If two lists are given, respectively pairs the list entries according to the order in which they are given. In this case the use of respectively is to allow the writer to give a lot of information without confusing the reader or writing several short sentences. Respectively is usually at the end of the sentence. In both cases, mentioning the order must be important to the meaning of the sentence otherwise it is not used.
For example: Bobby, Nicole and Daren wore red, green and blue coats, respectively.
List 1 List 2
Bobby wore a red coat.
Nicole wore a green coat.
Daren wore a blue coat.
Respective to two or more persons or things only in the order they were previously designated or mentioned.
The uses of these two words are usually incorrect or confusing as in the following examples.
1. Respectively is misplaced in the sentence; it is put before the nouns to which it refers.
Incorrect Equations 26 can be respectively linearized as:……(equations given)…13 Correct Equations 26 can be linearized as:……(equations given)…, respectively.
Incorrect The weights of the two experts are respectively 0.600 and 0.400.19 Correct The weights of the two experts are 0.600 and 0.400, respectively.
2. Respectively is inserted to express that there is a certain order in which something was done. However, the order is already implied elsewhere in the sentence or does not need to be expressed because it does not add value to meaning of the sentence.
Incorrect If both the core technology score and core quality score of a bottleneck process are, respectively, below certain scores, then we refer to strategy 1, otherwise, if either is, respectively, above a certain score, then we refer to strategy 2. Similarly, if the core technology and core quality are, respectively, above a certain score, then we refer to strategy 3, otherwise, if either is, respectively, below a certain score, then we refer to strategy 4.19
Correct If both the core technology score and core quality score of a bottleneck process are below certain scores, then we refer to strategy 1, otherwise, if either is above a certain score, then we refer to strategy 2. Similarly, if the core technology and core quality are above a certain score, then we refer to strategy
3, otherwise, if either is below a certain score, then we refer to strategy 4.
Incorrect
Correct Then, the rows of vortex due to both of the long and short blades are transformed into two singularities on the æ -plane and integrate the induced velocity along the blades respectively.20
Then, the rows of vortex due to both of the long and short blades are transformed into two singularities on the æ -plane and integrate the induced velocity along the blades.
3. In addition to 2, it is unclear to what ‘respectively’ refers.
Incorrect The dynamic characteristics of a rotor with asymmetric stiffness or with initial warp have been studied before respectively [1-4]
Correct The dynamic characteristics of a rotor with asymmetric stiffness or with initial warp have been studied before [1-4].
Incorrect The inlet and outlet temperature of the air cooler were measured using two thermocouples respectively.17
Correct The inlet and outlet temperature of the air cooler were measured by using two thermocouples.
‘In this paper’, ‘in this study’
Two errors occur when these phrases are used. The first is overuse. In some papers written by Chinese, these phrases can occur as much as twice per page. In papers written by native English writers these phrases are reserved for primarily two uses
1. In the introduction and conclusion to emphasize the content of the paper.
2. In the body of the paper, after referring to work not done by the author such as in
other journal articles or in standard.
Therefore, if either phrase occurs more than three times in a paper, its use is questionable. Actually, the reader is aware that the work presented is by the author (unless the author states otherwise) so there is no reason to repeat these phrases.
The second error is more subtle. The two phrases are interchanged.
Awkward In this paper, IDEAS was used to …. Correct In this study, IDEAS was used to….
Awkward
Correct In the paper, a SZG403 1 towing tractor is used as the sample vehicle, it components equivalent physical parameters are obtained by UG design and testing.9
In this study, a SZG403 1 towing tractor is used as the sample vehicle, it components equivalent physical parameters are obtained by UG design and testing.